Elevator Pitch

Imagine you have one minute to present yourself and your ideas to someone who can implement your solution or make a change. What would you say in that one minute elevator ride to convince this person that your ideas are worthy of attention. You have ten floors to make a compelling case. Take a few minutes to figure out how to make your proposal professional, succinct, and interesting. Then, write it down.

Today we will be peer reviewing the Solution Argument essay.

Introductions

Writing Effective Introductions

Introductions are very important. The link above has some great examples and explanations for writing introductions.

Much like an elevator pitch, an introduction has to make a good impression, grab your reader’s interest, and make them want to keep reading.

Take the elevator pitch you just wrote and figure out how to work it into your introduction. The elevator pitch can work as the intro, or add to your intro, to make a case for reading the rest of the essay.

Revise Using the Templates

Starting on page 139, go through the questions looking at your own essay.

Peer Editing

Check their citations. Do they look correct? Are they missing any citations?

Peer edit the same way you revise your own work. Pay attention to global issues first. Don’t worry about grammar or sentence structure yet. Focus on improving and clarifying the ideas.

Be specific in identifying problems or opportunities. Explain what the problem you see if. Avoid vague language like “awkward.” Explain what it is that is awkward and give suggestions for how to improve.

Offer suggestions for improvement. If they are not mentioning a major counterargument, suggest it for them to address. If a point is unclear, explain how they can clarify it.

Praise what is genuinely good in the paper. No false praise. If you like a particular point or passage, let them know.

Use proofreading symbols, if you know them. Otherwise, mark up the paper directly so that they will have a reference from which to revise their work.

Keep comments tactful. Treat other’s work as you would like to have your efforts treated. Stay on topic and don’t be mean or harsh, that is not productive.

Fill out the peer review worksheet.